abcmonkey7812 Jun 2004

Maybe this for that line?
"And all the more I contemplate it, fear disgruntles death."

And possibly this to replace the "navy" like ending, which I understand could be awkward.

"For my generation's limb shall be the one torn off the tree."

And finally, yes, I have very little education as to where semicolons should be placed. So if you raise an eyebrow to any, it's got a high possibility of being misplaced.