god'swife22 Jun 2004

The last four stanza I love.

In the first stanza you write

The quiet hum of the words
seem to fade into
each other in ...

Yuo can't say that, 'The quiet hum...seem to...', you see you continuing the sentence as if the subject was 'words' but it's not, it's 'hum'. 'words' is the subject of the preposition.


The quiet hum of words fading
into each other.

Or something like that.