Quarton3 Jul 2004

Nice try but this just doesn't work for me. Sorry:)
IMO, you should try writing poetry with no rhyme.
This would permit you to use words other than those
which rhyme and perhaps improve the content and flow.
For most poets today, rhyme is seldom used and when it
is, much skill is needed to avoid sounding forced or
using words that are obviously chosen based upon rhyme
and not on their merit. Robert Frost could do it but
for you and me, free verse is much better. So use rhyme
sparingly until you become more proficient as a poet.

I hope this helps.