Shuushin10 Jul 2004

Its a good story, kept me reading even if I had a shameful egoist moment of "prose on a poetry site... grrrr".

But its a sweet one. btw, the fix for sugar in the gas tank is a simple one. Involves simply replacing the fuel system.

that last paragraph, in particular, would make a good poem; it has the crux of the thing - that this tough man would become tender at the though of dissapointing his dad.