richa10 Jul 2004

"Thus is more than you can aim unto," Is a strange thing to say for a tweenager. Must have been watching Dawson's creek I guess.

I get the feeling of someone moving into young adulthood. There is apprehension in 'make a wanton of me' (I am guessing you use wanton in its precise sense of unchaste).

The relationship between the tweenager and the narrator is unclear. The same person, a younger sister maybe.

There is an elegance in the poem, a clear progression and a certain feeling of reflection. Very good.