jfgregboy25 Aug 2002

thank you, horus, for your completely worthless and sophomoric comment. i'm sure the poet really appreciates it. 2 things stand out to me. who is the addressee? is a real person being addressed? or, is a potential, intangible "path" being addressed? would be interested to know. secondly, the last 8 lines are obviously very "gutsy," and really don't seem to "gel" with the rest of the poem. i arrived at them, and they almost shocked me based on the innocence of the rest of the piece. perhaps somethign could be done with the style/form to change this.