fevriere5 Feb 2005

I really do like it - the first stanza was definitely captivating, for the confident entrance and then the creeping of doubts.

But call me ignorant.. It's not really.. Poetic. You're not hiding anything. And what you explain seems to go on a long time. I think there are lines here that are superfluous - they don't help so they drag.

Like "into the shadows". Sounds very The Rasmus. At least forget the linebreak that makes it independent.