Dan garcia-Black6 Feb 2005
I really like this poem. It is very light-hearted with much sarcasm. I believe the last four lines would be better re-arranged as follows:
"but Iâm better off girly
than a poetess, surely
this poem of mine
doesn't seem to rhyme"
It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).