poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Wedding Poem by al-naafiysh.

Dovina9 Feb 2005


Why do you say, "My goal is . . ." in verse 4, giving a way out, when you don't in the others?

"perfect union" is impossible and weakens the aparently possible committments.

"them" in the last verse is a bit nebulous, and I wonder why you even include this verse.