Dovina6 Apr 2005

I don’t know why you add to a good title, the phrase, “a belief poem for Dovina” unless your firmly standing shepherd reminds you of firm belief, and I either do not, or do, or also write about belief. In any case, it flows well, but I think you sacrifice too much clarity for form. Introducing the old English “’twas” so late in the poem, for example, and not using old English again, shows a strong desire to maintain meter. And that whole sentence is cumbersome. Shouldn’t “love” be “Love,” as a name?