zodiac11 May 2005

No, I'd like it better if it was written better. The first two lines, I mean.

Here are some dog-related rhymes for 'pet' you could have used instead:

fret, get, jet, let, met, set, sweat, vet, wet, yet, arquette, bassette, beget, beset, brunette, cornet, corvette, cossette, duet, forget, regret, rosette, roulette, tibet, upset, vignette, anisette, cigarette, flageolet, kitchenette, silhouette, sobriquet, tagamet, looks-rather-like-Cate-Blanchett, and so on.

If I can make one small suggestion: Don't make practically all your lines non sequitors, especially not the first two. You're going to do a lot better saying,

Then a happy healthy pet
Until he ate my tagomet,

than saying something like

Then a happy healthy pet.
What ever happened to John Larroquete?

Just a suggestion anyway. Personally, I like it when you rhyme.