Dovina10 Jun 2005

This starts our really good.

I don't know what you mean by the slabs rolling, or why she still looked 20.

Verse 3 is great.

Verse 4 is good. "wood" must refer to her cane.

Verse 5 is a bit strange, and kissing on shadows of the lost - well, I see you relating to the old couple as you imaging aging with your lover, but it could be better said.