LilMsLadyPoet14 Jun 2005

I was wondering if you left out a word. Should there be 'to' in the second to last line? "I'd want nothing of that to ever come true" (or "ever to") I also wondered if it was a typo in: "If they force the morning light/ To shine MY dark and shadowy night". I wondered if it was meant to read "BY"?
Also...just a thought...but "want" to be with you....seems a weak word for the kind of wanting you are doing here! I would do some brain-storming for a new word that better captures such a 'want'. I can think of several off the top of my head> yearn, ache, hunger. Or maybe 'want' would be fine if you changed "to be with you" to something 'stronger'? To lay with you....to dance with you...or better yet...to fly with you, to walk with you, or to love with you. Over-all I had to give this a high score, in spite of my thinking aloud here on the comments.