ALChemy28 Jun 2005

Good points.
In this case desecration means "To violate the sacredness of". Did you mean "decimation"?
Basically I'm saying sacrilege everywhere. But I see what you were thinking.
"More bodies" is a good poetic idea but this poem kind of has a loose rhyme and shortening the line makes it harder to make the "shells" "kill" connection. I considered that one a lot though. Yeah I know "THIER". It's a bad dyslexic habit I have yet to overcome.