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ReplyTo a comment on Birth, school, work and death. by darby pyn.

http://bandgeek15 Jul 2005

The ending lines were like rapid fire- but climatically worthy. Were you disregarding where the line breaks fell? It seems like this would be more poignant if one didn't have to scroll around to read the lines, and if the line breaks were placed strategically.