Dovina20 Aug 2005

"confused to understand" I see your point, and for that alone deserve a kiss.

I don't think "nor" works in the third stanza because it's about a real hand below a real rib, and not a continuation of verse 2. The duplication in "about this feeling" is there to show the difference between the act and the feeling. Weird, I know.

"platitudes" is strong, but it reminds me of the sayings attributed to angels - rest in peace, God be with you, I'm by your side, etc.

"City of Angels" might work into a nice addition. I'll consider it.

It is whimsical and non doctrinal, but your seggestion of fantasizing about sleeping with an angel is farther afield than I'm willing to go. The last verse is about sleeping with a man, and it compares this man with others who are like the angels in the former verses.

I'm good when I'm not poetic, but thanks, I see what you mean.