ALChemy25 Oct 2005

Thanks LadyPoet

The bird thing was kinda an experiment. It in one way criticizes the pre-concieved religious symbolism of the tree and in that way contradicts it. I thought it would be appropriate to have the bird line interupt the poem but I conceed it does throw the reader off a bit.
I looked up booth brink and amidst and there doesn't seem to be a problem. Brink: The upper edge of a steep or vertical slope. The verge.
Amidst:(or Amid) Surrounded by; in the middle of.
I must be missing something obvious I guess.

Good suggestions.
I hope there's a tree too. Lord knows I'll probably need it.
Sorry about the punctuation I must have had something against periods that day.