poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Mandarin Trial by cyan9.

cyan910 Nov 2005

Perhaps the repetition of sheets could go, but I like the rhyme to it, the problem is that I altered the first stanza that rhymed with this in order to improve the description, but now they are more seperated as a result. For me it is the 4th stanza that seems most out of place. I would welcome any ideas on how to integrate this.