poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on The Hawk by Dovina.

Dovina13 Nov 2005

I’ve been trying to stop howling for years, but it keeps welling up uncontrollably.

I see how "like pebbles, city deep" improves rhythm, and in this case I may follow you there, though it goes against gut desire for meaning.

And my But in the ass end of this, yes that too should go, I think.