LilMsLadyPoet12 Dec 2005

First...disclaimer:I have an affinity for the Celtic, but that said...I love this piece! And since I am in rare form tonight, I am suprised I took the time to pick around on this one and to let you know what bugged me alittle. (Feeling cynical and snide tonight...sorry.)I did give you a 9 on it, perhaps just 'cause you gave me something Celtic, with an olde feel to it, that so applies right now. Perhaps because nothing else piqued my interest tonight. Perhaps because it speaks from a time....never mind. Yeah, fix it up just a tweak, and I might just throw my first 10 out there!
Filigree.(,)~
That, that will and that, that be.(,)
Are dressed both in a
fellow down.~
angry men.> I would change to better the rythm/flow right there.~
Plato(.)~
turned and runned> (an') would flow better and follow the language used. (runned? >and ran? to run?)
Galveron(.)
for we are so few (too few? we're?)
large. (,)
girthly span.(kinda awkward right there, interupted the flow. ?shorten it, change?)