poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Night Work by forestchild7.

Sisterwolf29 Dec 2005

I do see one thing that might help you - don't
use and anymore than you have to. As in line 12, the first and could easily be eliminated - another thing you can do is use commas instead of and, you will convey your meaning and it's much smoother. I really do like this very much.