Paul S29 Dec 2005
Are the first two stanzas an intro of sorts, with a different rhythm? I can feel the rhythm in the last six stanzas but not in the first two. Also in line 4, stanza 1, is it supposed to read "there's a million" or "millions of?" And in stanza two, line 3, is it supposed to read "thread," as you have it, or "tread." Sorry if I seem nit-picky but an answer to these questions is helpful in getting a true handle on the poem.