ALChemy29 Jan 2006

Is it punctuation or grammatical wording? I suck at punctuation. I don't mind pushing the boundries of grammatical wording though, at least in poetry.
I just put this together today so it's probably a little raw.
Zodiac's "After Fighting" inspired it as far as metaphor goes. I wanted to use an old cliche and make it sound raw and new again.
I've had alot of revelations about my dad and my goals in the last few years and this was part of it.
Thanks Ranger.