LilMsLadyPoet2 Feb 2006

Awesome here:
"Such an accidental magic
to be an intimate of air,
a certain hollowness of bone,
wings curved like light--
each flight a prayer."
I wouldn't have used the --'s
I'd tweak>'like this winter sky,' and at
'Bleed red as spring', as something in there is messing with the flow alittle. I know you posted a while back, but I am tying to catch up on my reading...that said, some of what I am saying may have been already said...but I post without reading or seeing votes, that way you get my gut reaction and thoughts. I like this and would like to vote on a revised piece...it's worth a second look!