Nicholas Jones3 Feb 2006

The cheap comment would be to say that I wonder if you were you thinking when you wrote this poem.

The pretentious comment would be wonder whether the notion of something 'actually' right implies a belief in an objective and unchanging moral system and so the piece is effectively a piece of neo-Kantian thought and so an attack on the relativism of post-structuralist discourse.

The kind comment would be to say that it is an interesting idea but really requires further work.

The honest would be that this isn't a bad poem as such, it's just rather simplisitc, doesn't really seem to do anything, and leaves me cold.

Take your pick.