zodiac21 Feb 2006

"who's" should be "whose".

"that" in the first sentence should at least be "where" or "in which" for the sentence to be grammatical.

"deniles" is a cheesy play on words and doesn't add meaning.

I'm having some trouble getting the second verse. What's earned might not be rewarded? I'd have expected what's paid to be rewarded; what's earned is its own reward.

"thier" in last stanza = "their".

Nice. There's a couple of nice meanings in this.