poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Desperate Revival by Silverjackel.

Blue Magpie26 Feb 2006

The focus here is rather in and out of clarity and the poem does not paint a clear picture. For example, the verb mope, is not commensurate with pure despair, it is far to light to follow it. You mope when you are slightly bored or upset. There are also the inversions in the walk/talk lines.