Blue Magpie26 Feb 2006
Line 2 the word 'so' before intrigued would make the following line grammatically correct.
I take a good look at his attire.
Dressed like another other guy,
Blue jeans, T-shirt, track shoes.
This should not be indented and it should say 'like any other guy'
Iâm a new person inspired by There needs to be a comma between person and inspired.
This is nicely done, I am sure you could get published in a religiously oriented magazine if you tried.
However to my mind it is not a poem.