poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky by Ranger.

Ranger6 Mar 2006

I think I have it:

'Could the mist, a flowing turn of white
Seen by dawn - avail
Him, kneeling
No'

I might even get rid of the 'No', it feels a bit redundant with the edit. With the enjambment, would you capitalise 'Him', or keep it lowercase?