Dovina23 Mar 2006

Your removing Dickens leaves the street scene with scarf and shawl alone to show us the old-time setting. Now we have to wait until "love arcane" and still wonder if the shawl was just a hippie immitation.

Also, Cain was to Abel as she is to you. I thought that Cain's guilt was a good way of showing this.

It's still a good poem, but not really an improvement in my opinion.