god'swife28 Mar 2006

Well if the point of this so called poem is not to impress anyone this one succeeds. That little bio you give at the end(ABOUT THE ARTIST)is much closer to being poetry

ABOUT THE ARTIST

Jamie & Josh have split for good
though she clings.
He has slowly but gently
has pushed her away.

No kith nor kin, and a mind
not unlike a ten year old.
It was BIZARRE then that she dumped him.
He now, being a nice chap, had the perfect escape.

She had cancer young,
nearly died, so is clingy to Mum.
However,
Mum and 3 half sisters
(all by different dads)
treat her like Cinderella.

It's still a piece of crap but at least it flows better and is more interesting.

"It's still a good poem because it's real"
How the hell did you come up with this absurd notion? You don't have the first idea about poetry.

The first line about the pencil is good.