Niphredil1 May 2006

I enjoyed this as it was a very pleasant, innocent, and naturally rhymed piece. I think your boy would love you reading this to him! I know I would.

Suggestions:
'your virtue i pray is never harmed.' - the meter is slightly off. Try something like
'I pray that you be never harmed', or another idea,
'Let silence softly wrap you warm'. it ain't perfect, but play with it :-)