Caducus2 May 2006

2nd stanza good but drop the word - and - it reads better without it. I think lines 3/4 of S1 are too verbose, how about -

bawling into the megaphone
strong language sieved by mono
insult, logic,
scratching dirt over mistakes....

just have this impression that the passion in ones voice would be wrecked from a megaphone as everyone sounds the same when shouting through a m/phone