Bobjim9 May 2006

This is a very good poem, though because of the subject, I can't help but think of it in comparison to the classic "Not waving, but drowning" by Stevie Smith. Considering that's one of my favourite poems of all time, yours stands up really well.
You mention being afraid your life would show, is this meant to indicate a guilty conscience? I noticed you saying you were too proud at the top.
Did you know that drowning is a very peaceful way to die? By the time you're in danger of watching your life flash before your eyes, you're almost completely calm.