poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Camden Gaithright by MacFrantic.

Ranger7 Jun 2006

Superb. The final line seemed a little off-rhythm to me, or maybe a bit too long. Either way, it shouldn't be too tricky to fix. Also, being stupid as I am, I read it as 'A God accepting is a God deranged'.

P.S. - I wrote a paradelle recently. Damn tricky form.