wilco6 Jul 2006

First, the gramatical errors in this are downright terrible and make it extremely hard to read. I understand the point you're trying to get across, but your thoughts aren't cohesive. It's like yuo just though of a line, wrote it down and then forgot what you were driving at. I'm guessing you're young. Try reading some other poetry to get an idea of how to structure and write. Also, work on your grammar because the way this is now, it just doesn't make a lot of sense.

Also, if you want people to read and comment on your poems, don't you think it would be courteous to read and comment on some other people's works yourself?