poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Singing by ThereseWaneck.

Ranger4 Sep 2006

"A sweet sad song" didn't really seem to fit after the thunder/lightning/rock passage. Unless I missed something, which is highly plausible. I like the last three lines, but how about just "Slickly/step-step-steppin' to the storm/of the rain song's beat"?