poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Dream Grower by Enkidu.

Dovina4 Jan 2007

At first I thought you were in tune with the writer of Hebrews: “Let us consider how we may spur one another on toward love.” But the choking twist in the last verse has a sinister tone that sounds self-sacrificial. If you want the coaxing and stimulation of the first part, then consider a softer ending. Overall I like it.