Ranger13 Mar 2007

What I had in mind was a rhythm similar to the one you use in the first stanza (it's okay, you can despair at me if you like. I'm terrible at workshopping). The first two lines go like this:

da-DA da-DA-da, da-DA da-da-DA
DA-da, da-DA-da, DA-da-da DA

Does that make it any clearer?