lmp2 Jul 2007

i do like the rhythm that (it appears) you have tweaked. whatever, it works well with the theme.

i hear the wind on this prairie, the soft subtle moaning through the blades as they rustle, bending and sweeping their neighbors.

i also like the slow outward zoom, if you will, going from micro to macro, although if this was intentional, there are a few places where it breaks the progression: s3 & s5 zoom much further out.

something about the last stanza is uncomfortable. i guess putting yourself into the piece brings the image of the expanse of the prairie to bear, but doesn't sit well with me. much in the same way that some tlevision commercials will lead in with some awe-inspiring imagery, only to ruin the effect by presenting their product. but that is personal preference...

still, a great piece. thanks.