Christof11 Jul 2007

It obviously is confusing, as the green fleece is the weed - the hand is the fish. You may be right about 'First'. No comma after water, though - the line break is enough pause. That would be too much and would add nothing to the sense. No punctuation lessons are necessary, thanks.

OK. So is it not clear? I thought that the hair image was plainly referring to the weed - a fish doesn't move like that, and usually isn't green, or fleece-like. Is the hand not clearly enough the fish? I also thought the title made it clear what the subject is. If it isn't plain, the whole thing is, so to speak, blown out of the water. Oh damn it.