SupremeDreamer5 Sep 2008

The whole narrative first poem is unneccesary baggage.
Dump it in the grave from whence it sprung.

My advice for the second poem? Redo it and utter this phrase with devotion, in the manner of holy mantra:

"Cleave away the rot, preserve the nutritive flesh of this piteous slab of crude meat; see to it that thy fellow warrior may feast and be satiated with potent substance."