-=SeTTle=-11 May 2002

The rythm lacks the weight of the meaning- I suppose I would liken the sentiment in this poem to that of a raver saying the same words.

Be as specific in intent as you can. Either speed it up (by making it more repetetive or by making the meaning unrealistically timeless/universal) or slow it down, to let it span some time.

I think three's a good number to use (you use "forever" to start 3 lines), since we divide time into before now and after. Which is three things.