poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Words of Wisdom... by loneshadow29.

ThreeLittleBears1 Nov 2002

This comes off as being more of a sermon than a poem. I like very much what you have to say, but would recommend trying to take more of a 'show, don't tell approach'. Humbly suggest line-break to give your readers a pause.
Good thoughts you have here.