<~>14 Nov 2002

well, you use images that are so overused--angels and heaven, for example--and you bring nothing new to the reader. if you are left wanting more, tell us why? give us ssomething new. show us how your lover pleases you. reading this poem is like hearing someone say 'isn't it nice out today' when it's 80 and sunny there's a slight breeze. you state the obvious, and you do it obviously. try describing these experience with words that have texture, or smell, or taste...that's what left you hungry, right?
sorry i was rude.