Quarton19 Jan 2003

I liked this but it needs editing. Too much redundancy and needless fill words. One example:

"Night turning today, day to turning to night....The day dreams turning into nightmares....The cycle of madness never ending....Every day starting over and over....

Perhaps this would work better:

"Night turning to day; day to night....Day dreams becoming nightmares....The cycle of madness never ending....Each day like the one before...." If tightened a bit, the makings of an excellent poem.