TanHand10 Feb 2003
I don't like the cognitive path that the stanzas trace. It doesn't really scream "moment in time" does it? I can relate to it, however, since my insomnia has a lot to do with amphetamines. I'm not sure just how you'd cut it back, I'd give you the same advice I gave cadacus - get a very clear conception of what you want to say and how you want to say it and then execute it all in one go.