god'swife13 Feb 2003

Ok, so I took a few looks and I think this is entertaining and interesting. It has some small problems, you proboably should re-write this as many times as it takes to get it right. I like the verses, and, with the exception of the fourth verse, find them easily understood. But why are theye speaking in rhyme? It doesn't make sense to me. I especially like the hopefullness at the end, symbolized by a big smile- very Dickens. You lefting wanting to know more about the fate of these innocent souls. Write me another chapter.