<~>7 Mar 2003

the first 4 stanzas grab me. you need a 5th to complete the structure here:

take my hands (or skin, although touch is usually associated immediately with hands) ...

also, i respectfully suggest that your eyes have *not* failed you--they have taken it all in, and more. maybe your legs failed you--bringing you to where you could partake in these visions? maybe your legs failed you by not bearing you away?

your final stanza is weakest. if you'd like some suggestions for reworking the last, i'll gladly send them along.

z