Mr Pig (again)12 Apr 2003

My Dear Rich,
I have pasted 3 stanzas of interest to me where I think the poems strength lays. I need to know inherently more about the relationship. This reads like a showpiece of writing more than the emotionally charged insight I want. I dont want to come across like Lecter intimidating Clarisse, but fine writing and sentiment is the hardest thing to combine for personal satisfaction and reader satisfaction, its the marrying of the 2 I want you to do with this. The next moment you feel these emotions I want you to relinquish the laws of poetry and write one from the heart, read it aloud (I bet you do that dont you) and be honest with yourself about it affect it has on you. Poetry must (I believe) release the writer from the subject he is writing about. If one is honest about my work I would say there are much better traditionalist writer than me around true to the laws of poetry, I always feel a connection with your work - empathy, your uniqueness is empathy and clarity.

I just want you to write this honestly, it shut me out, the language is wonderful in places just tell me about the inherent love and relationship, the conclusion, the beauty the madness the essance of you and your mother, this is your story, your testanment and immortalization of your dear Mother.

There are only a few writers I will trust with my e-mail address I will give it to you shortly, if you ever need anything my dear boy you are most welcome

Pain liquified,
coursing through your body.
The secondary killer.First time crashed
second time failed
Suggestions unheeded.

Love neverending,
love pushed aside.
A deeper bond is born

Love neverending,
love pushed aside.
A deeper bond is born

Persona left behind,
thoughts carried with.
I can feel you inspiring
me.

These are the stanzas I love. Oh God I feel drunk as a Somersetian wasp.